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Grammatical and Spelling errors:

in:

"Her father is counting on her and her brother to choose Abnegation. Beatrice arrives with her family at the ceremony anxious about her choice. Her father is counting on her and her brother to choose Abnegation. During the ceremony Beatrice is deeply surprised by the fact that her brother Caleb chose Erudite, the faction of knowledge instead of Abnegation.

Beatrice arrives with her family at the ceremony anxious about her choice. Her father is counting on her and her brother to choose Abnegation."

how many times do you need to say, "Her father is counting on her..."?

In:

"After separating from the Dauntless-initiates under Lauren,",

you meant Dauntless-born initiates, right?

In:

"They learn that there first few lessons will be related to fighting",

you mean, "their first few..."

In:

"The higher they got, the more nervous Four seemed, just as Tris, but for different reasons—Four had been making feel Tris anxious for a while now and Four is afraid of heights."

it just doesn't make sense.  Maybe, "The higher they got, the more nervous Four seemed, as did Tris, but for different reasons- Four had been making Tris feel anxious for a while while Four is afraid of heights."

1) At the point when everyone has jumped off, Beatrice asks Christina if they should jump off together, which Christina accept.

It looked different, firstly Christina asked "- Together?", and Beatrice said "- Yeah.", and then they jumped on the roof.

2) Provoked and proud, she decides to jump off first when Max, a Dauntless leader, tells them to jump off the roof to get to the entrance of the compound

3) In the simulation, Beatrice is first made to choose between the cheese and knife

It wasn't cheese. It was meat.

It wasn't Max. It was Eric. We meet Max later.

English Edit

I don't know who wrote this article but clearly English is not their strength. Reading just part of it made me want to erase the thing and start from scratch because it reminded me of a kid telling me what happened at school or whatever. --Revan's Exile (talk) 04:59, August 4, 2017 (UTC)

I agree, major rewrite required {{SUBST:User:Utkar22/Sig|09:09,14-Aug-2017}} 09:09, August 14, 2017 (UTC)

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